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 Don’t Miss Kid Zones’ Grand Opening! Have a chance to win a free hosted birthday party!

Kid Zone is excited to anounce the opening of our 3rd location on the corner of Main and Univrsity. We’ll be having a celabration on Febuary 5th so make sure to drop by. Beverages and snacks will be provided from 4 PM to 5 PM followed by tours starting at 5:15 PM. Some of our most exciting aditions includes an indoor playground, a bowling alley, high tech music making equipment, and a new lounge for the adults who may need a time out. Parents are entilted to there own lounge, to!

For those who attend, if you bring a nonperisable food item for the local food bank, we’ll make sure it goes towards free entry on your next visit. A waterballoon tossing contest will be held at 3:30 to see who will win the next free hosted birthday party at Kid Zone.

Remember, Kid Zone is for children ages seven and up. Don’t miss this special event…its going to be a blast!

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 Don’t Miss Kid Zones’ Grand Opening Feb. 5!

Enter to Win a Free Birthday Party at the Zone!

Kid Zone is excited to announce the opening of our third location on the corner of Main Street and University Way. We’ll kick off the new location with a housewarming on Feb. 5 from 4 to 6 p.m. Stop by early to win a free birthday party by entering your child in a water balloon tossing contest at 3:30 p.m.!

Snacks will be on hand followed by tours of our awesome new indoor playground, bowling alley, high-tech music-making room and our swanky parents’ lounge, featuring an espresso stand, big-screen televisions, free Wi-Fi and much more. Even parents need a time out now and then!

When you stop by, bring a non-perishable food item for the local food bank and we’ll credit it to a free for your next visit.

Remember, Kid Zone is for children ages 7 and up. Don’t miss all the fun! See you Feb. 5!

By Elizabeth Baker

December 20, 2012 - Posted by | 1

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